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PostSubject: second char   Wed Mar 20, 2013 10:52 am

Name: Jeff Hulley
Actual Age: 18
How old they look: 21
Race/Creature Type:human
Country of Origin: Netherlands
Height: 6'4
Body type: He is tall and skinny
Skin tone: He is pale since in the netherlands he didn't get the sun very much.
Eyes: He has blue eyes
Hair: He has blonde hair that is cut short
Appearance: He wears a plain shirt that has different colors every day. He usually is very clean. He has a scar down his right arm. He always wears a necklace with a medic sign at the bottom. He doesn't brush his hair to often because he doesn't. But it usually stays the way he wakes up with it. He has a small nose and ears that stick out.(Are unattached at the back.) He sometimes wears a insulated coat on rainy days and cold days.
Personality: He tries to be as clean as possible. He doesn't like to fight much because he bruises easily wich makes him look dirty. He likes to be very social.
Diet: He eats mostly eats cheese,bread,meat, and potatoes.
Talents: He is a great sailor and medic.
Flaws: He is a little shy most of the time. He has a phobia of dirt.does not do well under a lot of pressure.(Like a life and death situation.)
Powers/Magic (if any): None
Weaknesses: He doesn't fight back much.He trips a lot from being tall.
Weapon(s): One small dagger hidden in his shoe.
Job in the Kingdom: He is a medic and sometimes goes along with boat rides to help there.
History: One day he was given a job to travel with a well known ship. He accepted and the next day he went aboard and they sailed away from the Netherlands. It was a long journey to him until they got near the British territories, when a huge storm hit. The boat was almost completely destroyed. He jumped ship and went along on the small boat to land. They gave him a horse and some supplies then traveled city to city. He finally came upon Albion. He liked how strange the people were and decided to stay for a month. It ended up him living there since he had no family back in the netherlands.

RP example: I walked onto deck feeling a little queasy. "Hmm." I said to myself watching some of the sailors sitting around. I started to walk to the captains cabin to go report that. But before I could get half way there one of the sailors yelled at me "Where do you think your goin." he said getting with his fellow sailors. i stopped in my place and stared at them studying them. They were all in there well twenties and very muscular. "Um...Back to da infirmary." I suggested. "Yes...Deres an idea." one of them shot back with a Dutch accent I knew very well. "Yea I guess." I said backing up to the door to the floor downward. They all moved together closer to me. In the corner of my eye, I saw the captain and turned to him and yelled "Hey captain." And started running in his direction as the other sailors walked away.

Notes:Has a dutch accent and is dutch. (Example: The=Da. Then when the word ends with TH it sounds like:Math=mass. sentence: Dat vampire was Da one that bit my Dad.)


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PostSubject: Re: second char   Wed Mar 20, 2013 4:00 pm

Correct your race/ethnicity and description of creature parts.
What on earth does. "Dominent. has many behavior actions" meam?

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PostSubject: Re: second char   Wed Mar 20, 2013 11:03 pm

Edited. I think.
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PostSubject: Re: second char   Wed Mar 20, 2013 11:14 pm

You've interchanged the two!
How is description of creature, "dutch"

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PostSubject: Re: second char   Wed Mar 20, 2013 11:19 pm

Race/Creature Type: Dutch,human

Dutch isn't in the description


Description of Creature: Many races. No powers. Each human acts differently as in eating,reactions,fighting..etc
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PostSubject: Re: second char   Wed Mar 20, 2013 11:22 pm

It sgouldnt be in creature type either. Dutch is not a creature -.-

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PostSubject: Re: second char   Wed Mar 20, 2013 11:29 pm

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PostSubject: Re: second char   Wed Mar 20, 2013 11:39 pm

Remove "Description of creature", you dont need it if he's completely human.

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PostSubject: Re: second char   Wed Mar 20, 2013 11:40 pm

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PostSubject: Re: second char   Wed Mar 20, 2013 11:48 pm

Put in a little more detail under "Appearance". What are his features like? Does he have any scars birthmarks? Any particular way he likes to groom himself..that sort of thing. 3-4 lines more.

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PostSubject: Re: second char   Thu Mar 21, 2013 7:16 am

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PostSubject: Re: second char   Thu Mar 21, 2013 12:24 pm

What do you by "unnattached at the back"?

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PostSubject: Re: second char   Thu Mar 21, 2013 12:33 pm

peoples ears are either attached totally and don't stick out or they have ears that stick out..wich is called unattached ear.
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PostSubject: Re: second char   Thu Mar 21, 2013 1:05 pm

Oh okay.
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